The
Dog House was this big red and yellow building on the corner of
Singleton. A small fast food joint, that sold hot dogs, nachos, burgers,
chips, fries, etc. It was a small teen hangout although I was only
five, I enjoyed going to the Dog House after a long hot Texas day and
getting a knockout, which in general was half vanilla ice cream and
half slushy. Depending on what flavor of syrup you wanted described the
different knockouts they served. I always enjoyed the Blue Coconut
Knockout because my mom.
Everyday on occasion my two brothers and I, use to just run around and
play with my cousins who are the same age as each of us, we use to
rumble and get into trouble. there was this car lot right across the
house we lived in. There was a small hole in the fence around the back
side of it. We use to sneak in and just run around playing tag or
hide-and-go-seek. There were many cars we use to just run, jump, and go
inside the cars.
Other
than the Dog House and the car lot, we just had our imagination,
running up and down the street, climbing trees, breaking into abandoned
houses, just being little misfits.
i believe that this story could have been had more detail with describing the story in the smallest thing. Ex. when he/she said hot Texas day explain how hot. Threw the whole story i think he/or she could have put somewhere in the story where they was talking to there cousins. The story made me feel that they where jumping around because they didn't explain how they got from one place to another. Other then that the tory turn out to be interesting.
ReplyDeleteOur imagination had to go beyond rainbows and unicorns I enjoyed this because you used unicorns and rainbow as an example of imagination. I used to do the same things when I was little just get in trouble all the time and always went outside so this story is well put together and well formatted good job.
ReplyDeleteI believe your childhood is sad. It should have been more detailed. You're lacking of (,) in some parts. I feel the same way as your childhood sometimes. Overall, good job!
ReplyDeleteI like the way you used more expressive words then just plain words. Your childhood must have been really boring considering it was just you and your family. This made me feel kind of sad because my childhood can relate to yours in some ways. You did a good job though. (:
ReplyDeleteI feel your pain. I used to live in small town where you couldn't go anywhere without driving 9182713918732972 miles to go do something fun. At least you had a little resturant. All the food you mentioned sounded very delicious. Also my favorite game as a little kid was hide in seek. Very interesting story.
ReplyDeletei like the fact you a had a pretty nice child hood except the fact you didn't have to much to do. this story makes my child hood look bad the only difference is that my hood was bigger and more people in it.but other than that i think you didn't not have any errors in this story. good job
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